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The Massacre Princess
sanam
25 April 2008 @ 10:43 pm
Creative Journal: NO LONGER DEAD.  
Title: Homogenous
Original Poetry
Summary: "My Beyond"
Rating: G?
"Stars dance beneath my feet"

Title: Fallen
Fandom: Kingdom Hearts
Pairing: Sora/Riku
Summary: An unhealthy obsession leads to more than one broken piece of furniture.
Rating: PG
"That celestial son gripped the heavy tangle of his silver locks"

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I know I'm a shite writer, but I could use some constructive criticism. The above pieces are for a class (meaning they are to be graded).

I also completed the listings of my colorbars (well...its as complete as its going to get) and icons over at [info]antsy_shocker.
 
 
Current Mood: restless
 
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Vaughn[info]messy_hair on April 26th, 2008 05:15 am (UTC)
I think they're both great and well written.

My only criticism would be that it sort of lacks a rythm or it seems a little disjointed. Though not much and didn't really hinder my reading. I think the more you write/read the less disjointed your writing will become.

:)
The Massacre Princess[info]sanam on April 26th, 2008 05:18 am (UTC)
Thanks for the input! I kind of noticed the same when I read my poem out loud, but it seemed the harder I worked to make it flow the more choppy and forced it became. D= Writing is very difficult for me.
 

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